Okay, I am really trying to improve the quality of my writing (partly for school, partly for myself)& so I would love some critical reviews of this fanfic. Not pimping for reviews, I really want constructive criticism. Promise. Your opinion?

It's a oneshot, so it won't take up much of your time, but it's Huddy, so if that's not your thing, feel free to disregard. Pleases, I really want to improve, so be as specific in your critiques as possible. Thank you so much!

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